blog #5

Part 1:
This week, I had one person come in at my hour looking for help on her paper. She was writing a summary for an article from English 101. She was pretty much finished with it, and was only asking for assistance in review to make sure she covered anything. After reading her paper, both me and the tutor mentioned that outside a few tiny grammatical errors, her paper was very well done. She covered all the necessary points, gave her opinion after the facts, and kept very focused on the assignment. Her topics were ordered well, and she provided extra information at key points of interest regarding the topic. Reading her work taught me that specific ordering and discussion while being focused on the work can make a paper very good on its own. She discussed and highlighted the main points of the article in her writing, and wrote around those ideas. Overall, the only ways that the main tutor and myself assisted her is with citation help and grammatical errors.  I feel I am getting progressively better with understanding what should be happening in these writings, and how to progressively make them better.
Part 2:
Original:One might argue that Morality Systems are not what makes video games good, and that it in fact detracts from the gaming experience. Many people would agree with the statement that they could play video games in order to avoid issues in real life situations. As Andrew Kauz, a blogger who has an issue with how Morality Systems are cliché and unnecessary, “we don't want to fraternize with people who are constantly judging us in real life, but we want to spend twenty hours with a game that does the same thing?” (Kauz, Andrew). It isn’t the uncommon for one to be directly affected by some of the stories in games. Being banned from being on an entire planet because of a bad choice the player made, much like which happens on one planet in Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic, can’t be emotionally uplifting to some players. While not necessarily emotionally uplifting, it’s also common in novels and movies for one to feel emotion for a character who received injustice. Video games are a fairly new art form, and it will take time for writers to develop ways to tell a story in a unique way, but also gets the point across while in the game. Art is supposed to spark emotions to those that are enjoying it, and video games do this in a way that no other art forms can do, with direct interaction with the viewer. Editted:One might argue that Morality Systems detract from the gaming experience. Many people would say they play video games in order to avoid issues in real life situations. As Andrew Kauz, a blogger who has an issue with how Morality Systems are cliché and unnecessary; says “we don't want to fraternize with people who are constantly judging us in real life, but we want to spend twenty hours with a game that does the same thing?” (Kauz, Andrew). It is common to be directly affected by some of the stories in games. Being banned from going to a planet because of a bad choice the player made, much like which happens on one planet in Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic, can’t be emotionally uplifting to some players. While not emotionally uplifting, it’s also common in novels and movies for one to feel emotion for a character who received injustice. Video games are a fairly new art form; it will take time for writers to develop ways to tell a story in a unique way, but also gets the point across while in the game. Art is supposed to spark emotions to those that are enjoying it, and video games do this in a way that no other art forms can do, with direct interaction with the viewer.The chapter helped me understand how to clean up my writing in a way that can help make my papers better. I can get my point across much quicker and more directly if I remove clutter and words that don't need to be there. Clutter just adds unnecessary words to the paper that can cause issue. I feel like this is something I should do more, even more so for when I am writing to not fill a page requirement. I do feel I write more nonsense if there is a page requirement, after I rough draft the important topics, I write more about things that don't matter too much. 
Part 3:
After explaining more of this information and what I learned from class, as well as my own cover letter and resume, the student understood more of what needed to occur and expressed she would make changes.
After explaining what I learned from class, as well as from my own experiences,  the student understood what needed to occur and expressed she would make changes.
I am starting to feel more comfortable with these tutorials, they are interesting to sit in on and also just express and exchange ideas.
I am feeling more comfortable with the tutorials, they are interesting to sit in on and exchange ideas.